A poem I wrote...

[DeadlyXScreams]

Okay, This is a LOVE Poem so if your not interested in said subject I suggest you look somewhere else because, well, I'm not that good, or so I believe and it's sappy.

I still need a title and I really can't think of one to suit my poem so if any ideas I'd like to know

I'm mainly putting this up because I trust the judgment of the people here I would show my friends but I'm a teenager and my friends are idiots (They will laugh and say poetry sucks)

Anyway, I would like to hear your criticism and comments (Also changes I could make to the poem if any come to mind)

I want to get most of my poems published (Hopefully all of my poems at once in a book) This is just one of many



So far from your arms,
Yet so close at heart,
With an undenying love,
But so much keeps us apart,
I ache for your presence,
I long for your touch,
I wish for your comfort,
I'm not asking for much,
I want to be with you,
I need nothing more,
But this cold heartless world,
Will not let me soar,
I'm pinned to the sadness,
To the people of hate,
You're all that I live for,
During this period of ache,
Though I know it will get better,
It normally does,
Life is nothing without you,
I refuse to be tough,
I need you here with me,
And I know it will be,
Our plans of the future,
I cannot wait to see,
You're everything I have,
You're all that I want,
I need nothing more,
Our love is enough!
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“When it hurts to look back, and you're scared to look ahead, you can look beside you and your best friend will be there.”

"People are like stained-glass windows. They sparkle and shine when the sun is out, but when the darkness sets in their true beauty is revealed only if there is a light from within."

[coralvalley]

Very fantastic job. I think some of the work here was a use of brilliant words and tie together considering how you tied things together. It was a romantic poem that used a great use of words and great way to tie things together to make it sound very professional. You should show this to your friends because it sounded great once I read it aloud to myself. It was very good, I say keep up with the great work because you do a fantastic job.