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marshall Grandmaster Poster

Joined: 06 May 2005 Posts: 289 Location: California
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Posted: Fri Aug 05, 2005 2:33 pm Post subject: Empty Dream |
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Empty Dream
Drops of rain
On a stormy night
The wind of shadow
Gives me such fright
Tug myself to bed
I went to sleep
Promises all the things
That I said I'll keep
Dream of you
Appear in front of my face
You ran away
I then would chase
To where you go
and where you'll be
To be in reach
Right next to me
Lifeless you look
You start to float
Reaching out my hand
I caught your coat
It's all I have
When you disappear
If I have one wish
I'll wish you'll near
It's all a dream
That happen in my mind
To stop the future
And rewind the time
Impossible it is
As you can see
You're no longer around
It's only me
Marshall -7-25-05
Please excuse my grammar. Any fix or correction is appreciated.  _________________ Anime Fever Come and join
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cherii Master Poster
Joined: 30 Jul 2005 Posts: 173
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Posted: Fri Aug 05, 2005 7:15 pm Post subject: |
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That poem was quite nice.
| Quote: | | Lifeless you looks |
could just be...
You used the right emotions in the poem too! |
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marshall Grandmaster Poster

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Posted: Fri Aug 05, 2005 10:44 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks. I just fixed it. _________________ Anime Fever Come and join |
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