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arrha
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 Posted: Fri Jan 13, 2006 6:23 am Post subject: Fire... (an analogy of sorts...) |
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Here's something I wrote for my Communications class. We were timed while we were writing this, and this was done under 3 minutes, seriously...
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Most people are afraid of fire, as they could be burned, scorched or even killed. Fire is like a big, brick stone wall, hindering and obstructing us from what we truly want and desire. But what we don't know is that, once we get across those burning flames, no matter how scorched our body may be, the soul could finally be free.
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This was an assigned interpretative analogy, written in not more than 3 sentences, about something relevant we read in an inspirational book. Hopefully, the following makes sense to you people. The analogy I chose was between fire and taking risks.
Comments & constructive criticisms are appreciated. Send them all in.
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bardsmanship
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| You made a good choice for an analogy, and the writing's good too. It makes sense, so don't worry =). I like how you linked fire and taking risks in a way that was both insightful and creative. Nice work, looking forward to seeing more of you here. |
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arrha
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 Thank you for the nice comments and the welcome... I'm having a lot of fun, posting stuff here plus the comments I receive are either very nice or very insightful.
Again, thanks a lot for taking the time to comment.
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burek
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I like it! I don't particularly like the first and second sentence, but the third one good and it gives a nice edge. 
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