Girl_3

vettas · Grandmaster Poster Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 347

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Comments/Criticism greatly appreciated.

Du57y · Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 6:42 pm Post subject:

Yay I'm here for comments and criticism!! I will call it ... constructive criticism ...

Right so, I don't know what you used to do this image, it strongly comes off as you had a picture and traced over it in a program like Photoshop or something with a mouse. The line work makes me uneasy (although some people will like the expressive lines, depending on what you're going for) but it's that uneasy lines that make it look like you used a mouse rather than a tablet. The lines are scratchy looking to me as well, I've done a couple pics like this where the line work turns out scratchy, it's because I didn't/still don't know enough about how to clean them up real nice.

I'm going to assume you did in fact trace over a picture, and I can compliment you on that because you have managed to simplify the line work very well. If you didn't trace over a picture or did it off the top of your head that's absolutely brilliant work. A way I figure you've traced it is because a picture of a skinny girl can look fine and she is skinny, when the picture is traced she looks fatter ... or wider ... "Less shapely" I think is what I'm looking for.

Anyway, brilliant work with the lighting beside the head, It's near blinding.

The parts of the elbow and hand are quite weird looking. The elbow looks like it suddenly jumps out and the hand is very ... abstract ... not detailed ... The lips are beautiful organic and the skin tone is excellent. I obviously don't know what this is for or ... it's intent, but I personally think that is could be made better by how you choose to shadow it in. It practically looks like there's a base skin tone and a shadow skin tone. Some shadows could be darker, the highlights are done very well. You could try fooling around with warm and cool colors of the skin, if a shadow is black, take it one step up, a tricky situation is where in an actual picture, a massive chunk may just appear 1 skin tone, it's then up to you to add some more to make it visually more interesting. there are tons of images where you may see pure light blue on someones face and it looks beautiful.

Anyway, nice composition, nice subtle nipple reference ... nice light shiny part, GOOD JOB ^_^
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vettas · Grandmaster Poster Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 347

Du57y · Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 10:50 pm Post subject:

Ah I see, were you looking off a picture from real life or is it completely done off the top of your head? I use photoshop for drawing, but with a tablet, did you use a mouse? I've seen pictures that have made me drool done by mouses, I just can't believe it, must be some mouses with pretty good control. How long did it take you to do?
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vettas · Grandmaster Poster Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 347

Haven't seen many good digital paintings done entirely by mouse. Good vectors and tracings by mouse, seen plenty of those.

I need to get my hands on a tablet, so I can ink digitally.

Du57y · Posted: Tue Jul 24, 2007 12:16 am Post subject:

Okay so here's one done by mouse:

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46574166/

Admittedly I had to search for that one, but I did see an excellent one earlier today. I honestly didn't think it was possible to do a stickman with a mouse when I was younger. YES TABLETS ARE GOOD. You should probably get one ...
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Xtreme · Posted: Tue Jul 24, 2007 9:53 pm Post subject:

The anatomy and proportions aren't perfect, but all-in-all, it's a well done piece, in my opinion.

Voldemort · Posted: Wed Jul 25, 2007 3:52 am Post subject:

If you did the whole thing from scratch, without using any real picture..hats off. It's excellent. Shocked

I don't really like the lips of the picture, they don't look that real.. Or maybe they are just fine and I'm been a bit crazy. Silly

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spock · Posted: Thu Jul 26, 2007 4:51 am Post subject:

Like the others said, the hand on the table/ground looks a bit strange, but otherwise, it's some other good work.

You seem to be a really skilled/talented drawer.
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drath · D Joined: 27 Sep 2005 Posts: 1690 Location: Canada

I think this is my favorite one out of all your drawings. The colors and sensibility is very nice. The face also looks much better than your others, and really, that's usually the most important part when you are drawing things like this. Like everybody else has probably already said, the right arm and hand just looks weird. It kind of looks almost unfinished. The background is also really good in this, especially the shine-ray effect in the background; it adds a really nice touch.
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Camilu · Novice Poster Joined: 06 Jun 2007 Posts: 13

Fahhhh, that divine that effect! That image is very good Is average stranger the effect, but am good, I like the bottom, emphasize battery to the girl. Also I like that effect there at heart like a light, the very good truth

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