Poem: Should i smile or cry?

Wick · Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 10:42 am Post subject: Poem: Should i smile or cry?

Here is a poem I wrote in class today.

Should i smile because
we are friends?
Should i smile because
I have someone to talk to?
Should i smile because
you care for me?
Should i smile because
you understand?
Should i smile because
I love you?

Should i cry because
we'll never be more than "just friends"?
Should i cry because
You dont feel the same way?
Should i cry because
I want to hold you
Should i cry because
I want you to be mine
Should i cry because
I love you?

Tell me what you think please

slsc · Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 2:32 pm Post subject:

Perhaps less anaphora?

commonsense · Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 2:42 pm Post subject:

someone got a crush
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Wick · Posted: Tue May 09, 2006 2:47 pm Post subject:

whats anaphora?

EDIT - nevermind, i had a look in my dictionary. Maybe there could be less but i think it is ok as it is.

lh901121 · Novice Poster Joined: 13 May 2006 Posts: 30

I reckon you should make a move on this special someone who you so obviously care for- then eaither way you will know whether they do or don't feel the same way. Its better knowing, than bvottling these thoughts inside. Even if they don't feel the same way, at least you gave it a shot- its better than that empty feeling of wondering!

Wick · Posted: Tue May 16, 2006 12:55 pm Post subject:

thanks, ill take your advice, but im just really nervous Sad

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