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[super_awesome_ninja]

I haven't really thought of a title for the poem. If you think of something let me know. This is a sort of experiment with a free verse poem. I tried to use words I had never used before, so some of them may not be used in the correct context. I hope they are though.


Don't deprecate me if you don't know me
I am not the perception of putative teens
I have been ostracized
I am recalcitrant
What gives you the right
To be my panel
These people are vacuous
Don't act like you're virtus
My are it luminous
Yet it is out casted
Not worthy to make your cut
Don't give me this
Go ahead and vie for their lonely attention
Those magisters don't understand
Their conception of me is twisted
By the decorum of political society
I will be pernicious to your social morals
Your judgement is apocryphal
The ideas you hold are inexorably wrong
Don't define me as inept
Because I lay outside your predetermined dimensions
My abstractions are of perfectly sane character
Don't write me off as some fatuous child
Of a ludicrous demeanor
I am as I want
I am not your marionette
Nor your sublime perfection

[WhiteRabbit1313]

My, what large words you have!

The better to express myself with, dear.

Perhaps you might want to look into "dumbing down" the words in this. I had to continually look up the definitions, which obstructed with the flow of the poem, and really detracted from what you're trying to express. As for the title, the thought of either "puppet" or "marionette" struck me. It seems that you're trying to convey that you don't want other people to judge you and use you, and you even mentioned the world marionette, so I thought those titles seemed ok. What do you think?
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