You win (poem)

[unreal_me]

Im not a poetic person and usually the only time I write poems (or anything for that matter) is for school. I wrote this for a friend of mine when she was feeling kind of down.

You win
You win life
You stand above all else
For a period in time you stand above

Above the arrogant
Above the normal
Above the sluts
Above conformity
Those are in excess
They all blend into mush

But you defeat the mush
You defeat what you envy
You defeat the green

The shallow pool of green
green mush of bland
blandness of conformity
and every person being the **** same
The shallow pool is pushed away
By the deepness of the dimond

When the exterior is lost
The soul stands alone
Your soul
Your personality
The core of what's wanted
What should be wanted
What is needed

What you posses
A soul of many colours
The many traits
Your beauty
Your mind
Your humour
Everything that matters

You have what others lack
Exterior beauty is only bonus
When it all desolves
Your beautiful core is left shining
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[WhiteRabbit1313]

Very nice. The words "sluts" and "****" (I can only guess what that should mean...) seem out of place for this poem. Go for something a little duller for those two words. But otherwise, great expression.
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